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Review:Roots in Water says:
Just as this is your first foray into something not having to do with the Trio, this is my first realy foray in the land of Sirius/OC. And it was a nice trip. I've heard all sorts of horrors about the clicheness and Mary-Sue-ness of these sorts of stories, but this wasn't like that at all. I'm so happy that they didn't meet at Hogwarts- that they were older (not childhood sweethearts). His first meeting with her gave the reader a glimpse of her bravery and courage, which I assume would be necessary to live with Sirius.

The only thing I noticed was the sentence "Although it was but a small thread in the fabric of his life, if it was removed, the whole of him would unravel"- the phrasing sounded awkward to me.

However, since your beginning (and such a lovely opening it was!), I'd been half-thinking that she would turn out to be a Death Eater, and I was so glad it wasn't true. The only problem I noted was that wouldn't they have put protective wards around their honeymoon destination? (But then, that would be the Death Eater's point, as you said, that they can get in anywhere and everywhere).

The ending was very appropriate and I liked the inclusion of Harry's last lesson from Sirius. I think that it was very well done and very well written.

This was a pleasure to read.

Roots in Water (Hufflepuff)

Author's Response: How funny you would be thinking she was a Death Eater, but in looking at it again, I could see how you saw that.

Yeah, pretty much it was the Death Eaters can be anywhere and let's just say Sirius wasn't quite as proficient and paranoid as he was in his later years.

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