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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
I love short chapters! Not that I don't also enjoy the occasional long chapter, but long chapters tend to drag on sometimes where as you get the point across so easily in these short ones.

I giggled when Lucy was going through possible things Lily had told Severus to convince him to help her. Her internal dialogue is fantastic.

I don't know if I mentioned it in the first chapter, but I know I did in your other story about the dialogue tags and how it bugs me. So I'm bringing it up again, sorry. :(

I find it interesting how Snape's idea of tutoring her was to just rewrite her book with the corrections he had made. Also, I mean, I guess I should've realized it from HBP but Snape is really good at Potions. I don't know, just imagining him simply rewriting the instructions to get a better potion, it kind of baffles me actually, how he did that as a student.

Poor Lucy is pretty helpless with Potions, isn't she? I wonder how Sirius feels about his girlfriend spending time alone with Snape...

Nice chapter, by the way! I'm really enjoying this story so far. :)

forsakenphoenix (ravenclaw)

Author's Response: Yes, this is probably the shortest one I've ever written!

I really loved writing her internal dialogue. Not that I can truly imagine sweet little Lily saying such provocative things. Poor Lucy and her delusions :)

I know, I know, the dialogue tags. It will be that way in all of my stories, and I've always written like that, so I'm not sure how likely I am to change it. I hope it doesn't interrupt your reading too badly.

You'll find out just how Sirius feels if you keep reading :)

Thanks for another lovely review!

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