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Review:Akussa says:
Hi!

This was a very interesting one-shot. I especially like the way you chose to present it with the irregular flow; I thought it was fitting with the boy's life. Regulus is a very interesting character and I thought you did a great job, giving him a soul and mind of his own. The characterization you went with was very well done and it worked well with the little we know of him.

Like I said, I really like the way you wrote this piece, it is original and you manage to make the reader go through a lot of emotions. There is one thing that bothered me a little at times and it is your sentence structure. It could only be me, considering english isn't my native language, but sometimes, it was hard for me to understand what you meant. Most of the time, the problems were missing ponctuation (eg. : Is it hard to believe that with them as parents I turned out as I did?) or the conjugaison of verbs (eg. : The camelís back was broke.). It is up to you wether you decide to go over your story or not. It is not a dramatic problem or anything; it's simply a proposition for you to improve your already great story.

Great job!

Akussa (Gryffindor)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm glad you liked the irregular flow- it's how it came out when I decided to write the story. I think that I couldn't write it if I tried to do so in chronological order.

I'm so glad you thought he was IC.

As for my sentence structure, I'll go back and reread it. They sound fine to me, but then again I'm no grammer genius! And thanks for providing specific examples- it makes looking out for the mistakes that much easier.

And thanks so much for the compliment. I'm so happy you liked it!

Thanks once again for taking the time to review!


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