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Review:uncivilized says:
Um... wow. That's the first thing that came to mind when I read this piece. I swear, my heart was racing. The descriptions that you use are incredible - It's painted so clearly in my mind and I feel like I'm in the room with Sybill. I can feel her pain and distress and it almost hurts to read (which, clearly, is a very good thing ^_^).

I like what you've done with her visions - adding consequences for having such a power is so good to read because I honestly doubt seeing visions and the future would be all sunshine and daisies. It adds realism, which I think makes stories even better to read.

I always have trouble writing in present tense and I sometimes find it trying to read, but I'm glad that you did. I think it works really well here - because it's much more 'active' to read. It's as if what you're reading is happening right now and for something like this, I think it just adds power and allows the emotions and feelings to come across so much clearer. There are so many lovely sentences and the way you put words together is magnificent.

This is such a beautiful piece. Well done. :) ♥

-taylor
[uncivilized/hufflepuff]

Author's Response: Hi Taylor, thanks for the review, sorry it has taken such a long time for me to reply to it, no excuse for that but thanks all the same.
I'm glad you enjoyed this story, and engaged so much with it, thats lovely hearing that. But thanks for pointing out I should check out the tense issues in places, will do, eventually lol. I am glad that you enjoyed it, that's wonderful to hear. Thanks again for the review, much appreciated :) Bobby xx


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