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Review:Jazzeh Turnip says:
This shows that you have the potential to be a very good writer. You've written how she's feeling without really writing how she's feeling at all. You've just eplained her situation and allowed the audience to make their own assumptions of her emotions.

I really loved the cloud analogy, and I thought this line was really beautiful "The clouds had been white as she flew among them."

There's a little typo I caught in the 9th paragraph. "Well, no [one] was asking you to stick your big nose in[,] were they?" You also have a bit of a problem with punctuation where dialogue is concerned. I don't know how long ago you wrote this (I didn't check :D) so it may be that you've improved since then. If you haven't then in Writers Resources on the forums there are plenty of things to help with that, I believe :)

You've really captured Ginny's fiery personality well. I can really see her thinking she needs to be tough to prove herself strong to her brothers, and using the extendable ears too. I could really feel her get upset when she heard Harry say it wouldn't happen again. It's rare that I feel for Ginny, but I really did here. Well done. It's almost as if she regrets loving him which is really heart breaking. Something like that should never be regretted.

I also really love how you've managed to write her feeling so left out. First she's the only girl in her family, she's been rejected by Harry and now her friends are leaving her alone. That's a thing a lot of people can empathise with.

Great story :) There are a few mistakes, and your grammar in speech needs to be looked at but the story itself is very good. I enjoyed it very much anyway, and I don't often like Ginny fics :)

Lorren.

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