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Review:Jazzeh Turnip says:
You've really captured Harry here. His reluctance to let go of something as precious to him as the cloak is really realistic, as we've seen in the books how attached he gets to objects and people.

The short sentence where you just say "He had a proper family now" is brilliant. A big paragraph full of long sentences then the most important thing is just in this tiny sentence. You genius ;)

Oooh, I like how he hasn't given James the cloak first year, as he was given it. I always thought that was a little silly of Dumbledore anyway, giving such a little kid something so... BIG like the invisibility cloak. I suppose Harry did seem fairly grown up though, huh?

I think it's a little weird how Harry just told James about giving him the cloak all in one, but at the same time it has the same kind of simplicity that JKR uses in her writing, so you can put your own action and emotion into it.

Hahahahaha! James the troublemaker ^_^ Hahahaha. Your Ginny reminds me a lot of Molly, but I really like that. She was really fiery in the books, just like Molly, and I can really see her turning out to be the same kind of mother as HER mother was.

Sophia, my love, this is brilliantly simple. I've never read a fic on this story line :D I saw no errors with spelling or grammar, so you're all cool on that 'n' junk. Weel dooone! :)

Author's Response: I love this review, Lorren! You've picked up on the parts I was happy with AND the parts I wasn't sure about. ^_^

Harry is a character I've struggled with in the past, but I'm glad you think I wrote his character alright. :) James definitely is a troublemaker and one I hope to write more about in the future. :)

Thank you! :D

-Sophia


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