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Review:MyMyMiss says:
Hello there, I am here to judge your entry!!

Please be aware that it is a very close contest as all seven entries that I had where brilliantly constructed.

“I hate him! I hate him so much!” Lily screamed, tearing up the piece of parchment she had been scribbling on and tossing it on her bedroom floor.
- Did the paper offend her? ^.^ Nah, this was really well presented and I could see her stnading in her room doing this.

People like him killed people like her.
-This was a little sad :( It made me teary.

“Filthy Mudblood. Filthy Mudblood. Filthy. Little. Mudblood.”
- Snap. I'd flip over him!! I'd bite him! :D

Onwards... I really like how you constructed the Poem into both chapters of this story. I'm a little dissappointed that you didn't finish but none the less I am happy with what you have brought to the table, and as I said, not being finished will NOT lessen my thought on your story.

I love how you based the First chapter purely on Lily/Severus. What he had done, and how it affected her and her emotions. You really brought a new side to Lily and Severus to readers. I was rather shocked that I liked this piece as I actually hate mauraders. :P

The Second chapter was just as creative as the first. You showed James and how Lily didn't care for Severus anymore. Also how James made so many feeble attempts to court Lily.

You have a really good piece of writing here and I am glad you took the oppurtunity to take part in my challenge. I hope too see you again in further ones I hold. Please look out for a blog soon confirming the winners of the 10 things I hate Challenge.

~Karni. x

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm pretty sad I didn't finish it before the deadline myself as I had it all planned out, but life got in the way. There are only two more chapters that need to be done, so I hope you'll come back and read those when they're finished.

This story was a lot of fun to write, mostly because it was challenging and I really enjoyed it. I'm glad that you did as well!

Thanks again,

Dem


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