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Review:academica says:
Hey there! This is academica with your review :)

This was very well done. It provided a rather insightful look into the details of Sirius's final years, and I can appreciate the effort you put into including small details, i.e. having Sirius think about checking the Dursleys for Harry because of what Hagrid said to him all those years ago.

You asked me about your characterization of Greg. From the brief mention of him, he seemed like a typical vengeful ex-boyfriend. Cora's characterization bothered me a little bit, though; it seemed like you rushed the relationship somewhat in order to make it fit into a one-shot. That's just my opinion, though.

The story was very interesting and I'm impressed by your ability to stick to canon Sirius. The one other thing I would recommend is that you look into getting a beta; I noticed a few small technical errors, like problems with commas and capitalization in the wrong place, and a beta could help you with those little things that make the flow of a story just that much smoother.

Great job, and thanks for requesting a review! I hope my comments are helpful :)

academica

Author's Response: yay! thank you for the lovely review. Yeah, it was hard not to make things seem rushed because it was a one-shot. The point I was trying to get across was that they weren't going to have a slow relationship because Sirius didn't have a lot of time to be there before someone caught him. I was looking over the story today too and saw those errors, not something I wouldn't be able to fix, just need the time to fix them. I'm very proud that you liked the detail I tried putting in, unfortunately it's hard to do that and have a smaller story lol :P
Thanks for the review again, I'm proud to have been your 200th :) congrats too by the way!
you were very helpful thanks,
Owlpost68


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