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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
You and your beta did a good job. I didn't find too many issue with grammar/spelling. The only thing I noticed is that you should be using a comma between dialogue and a tag line rather than a period. So you should have something like this: "Blah blah blah," said so-and-so. You use periods. It's not a big deal but that kind of thing does bug me.

Anyway, I'm not a huge fan of Next Gen fics - I actually don't read much outside of Marauder era so I'm always a little confused by who each character is (I haven't read DH in four years) so thanks for making sure to include little hints about the characters identity; for example, I wasn't quite sure who Hugo was but in the context, I could figure it out.

I think the idea of Scorpius being a misunderstood singer whose supposed exploits with women are posted all over magazines and Rose as the woman who hates him for it but learns he's a different man and falls in love with him is cliche. So it would be nice when you continue with your story, you plan to include things that people wouldn't expect from a cliched plot line to keep them on their toes. It's not necessarily BAD but if you read tons of fics like it, it might get boring. I haven't read much fanfic lately so I can't say that I myself find the idea particular boring but just giving you a head's up.

Overall, not a bad start. I hope you get more reviewers soon! I'm sorry I'm not really interested in Next Gen or else I would continue following your story just to see how it turns out. But if you ever want another review, just shoot me a PM on the forums and I'll come back. :)

Author's Response: hey thank you for the review i will get to yours tomorow as i had to work all night tonight. i think that for scorose this plot isnt really used i guess i dont know since i dont really read next gen very often but i do plan on adding more to the fic then just that. thank you again for the review!

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