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Review:Ali4077 says:
I loved this chapter :) I understood it far more than the prologue.. but I'm pretty sure that as the chapters come, if you continue writing it, I'll understand it a lot more.

I thought it was a good idea having the victim as someone we all knew. Makes it a little more interesting as it's a character you've followed, or at least heard of.

Also yet again your description was brilliant. It's all rather gruesome, but it wouldn't be as interesting if it wasn't would it?

I loved Audrey's relationship with Caine. I found the fact that she had to stun him hilarious, and then of course Percy turned up, just making everything even more awkward. I must admit I've never actually bothered to read a Percy/Audrey before but this one is certainly grabbing my attention. I like how little Audrey seems to currently like Percy too, it's interesting.

Great job and keep writing. I can't wait to read the next chapter. :) Thank you so much for submitting this into my challenge so I was able to read it.

Author's Response: Thanks for all the compliments on description! I got a number of comments on one of my previous stories saying that I should work on my description, so I've really been focusing on that aspect of my writing for this story. Glad to hear that it's panning out, even if most of the descriptions are a little gross. : P

Caine is easily my favorite character in the story, which is too bad because he's not really super important...well, at least not in the way you'd expect. Audrey/Percy is a relationship I've been wanting to write for a while...truthfully, I'm still struggling to write their interactions. There's only so much witty banter one can have chasing down criminals! But yes, eventually something will happen to change Audrey's mind about The Pompous Percy.

Hope you'll take a look at the new chapter! I'm looking forward to your review.
xoxo wenderbender


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