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Review:Deltaris says:
I've actually read this before, have you deleted and reposted? Either way, I'm glad, because I couldn't remember the name and it intrigued me the first time through.

In comparison to the prequel, it feels as if the writing styles are different. And they are completely unrelated as of now, and I'm very curious as to how you tie everything together.

The flow was natural; descriptions giving the perfect amount of detail without becoming to heavy for the rest of the chapter. I also liked how you didn't do the typical *START/END FLASHBACK* for showing Caine's assignment situation. It fit with what was currently going on without feeling out of place. (I really hate it when people do that; enough that it makes me stop reading the story. I just can't get past it.)

Is this the same Audrey that eventually marries Percy? That's always been something of questioning; we only every saw Percy with Penelope in the series, and then JKR gives us Audrey and their kids with no explanation. If it is, I'm glad you've taken on showing how they got together. That is, assuming they do ;)

Your characterization is wonderful as well. Overall, a very good job.

Author's Response: Yes, I did delete and repost! It was originally the first chapter, but I wanted to add a prologue...thanks for rereading and reviewing.

You're right about the style change--amazing that you caught that! I talked to a friend who suggested a try adding more description and detail to my stories, so I really emphasized that in my prologue. I also had a slightly different story in mind when I wrote this chapter, so that might've come across. Hopefully it doesn't feel too disjointed, the link becomes clear in the next two chapters.

Yes, the *flashback* thing annoys me too. Good to hear that the time change was clear even without the tags ^_^. This IS the same Audrey who marries Percy...I love Audrey/Percy stories, so I couldn't help trying my hand at it.

Thanks for all the lovely compliments, I hope you'll come back and check out the next chapter once it's up!

xoxo wenderbender

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