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Review:lia_2390 says:
Ok, the last chapter. I couldn't just leave it off after reviewing most of the story and I knew I'd feel bad if I didn't give you this last one.

Then they spent years sinking slowly and painfully into their holes of self-destruction, allowing the guilt to gnaw at them by keeping up this charade! There was nothing about this that had to be so all!

I find it funny when she told Valerie 'That's up to him.' Again, how I wish I could slap her.

This chapter was the best out of the lot, I think. I continue to be in awe at the use of language you present in your stories and this one, obviously, is no exception. I really liked the metaphor (? - sorry, I speak mostly science now and it doesn't use figurative devices :P) with the clock.

I'm glad you showed us Victoire's side of this twisted tale, how she admitted she was unhappy as well. I think I mentioned in an earlier review that there's always some part of it all that we don't see. I'm glad that she was the one who came to Molly in the end and they had a conversation of sorts where looks spoke much more than the words did, even though the latter was the catalyst.

'He loves you. You love him. Is it that difficult?' - It really shouldn't be but in reality it is. Shame, really.

After 6 and a half chapters of angst and unfinished business, they finally got their happy ending. It really was a nice ending and I really like that when they talk to each other, they say so little but it means so much.

I'm really glad I got this story for the exchange. Not only did I enjoy it but it really made me think.


Author's Response: Hi lovely!

Nothing at all! I did wonder sometimes whether my choice of making this 7 chapters - as implied in the summary - was drawing it out a bit but hopefully it was pretty successful :P

Oh really? I still have a very firm attachment to the 2nd and 5th chapters and would probably say they're the best. This one gave me a lot of trouble and I was just glad to get something that I could post and that would give me a solid ending. I will chase up that metaphor as soon as HPFF starts behaving itself for me again because I can't remember it :P

I think getting Victoire in was always going to be the most important thing in the believability of this. I didn't want her to just be the meek one who stuck by him even though he didn't love her. I wanted to give her a story too.

She proposed and she stayed with him but it was out of her own pride and selfishness that she did it. She had her own affairs, less serious than Teddy's because they were just flings, testing the water. I think she loved him and eventually she saw what Molly, Teddy, Lucy and the others had seen for ages: he wasn't happy and so she wasn't happy and she knew that it was really up to her. She had to give her blessing for this to work and she could sit through the endless arguments and the fighting but at the end of the day, it wasn't going to make it any better.

That is one of my favourite lines. I kept trying to get it in earlier but it just wouldn't work and I finally found the character that needed to say it. I would love to give Victoire her own one-shot but I won't overdo it :P I'm kind of intrigued by what her thought process was after she found out about Teddy and Molly and when he went back to her. She's an interesting character too.

They did and I was so tempted to make it ambiguous or leave it hanging but I didn't want to feel that I had to write a sequel about it in a month or two's time, to satisfy my own imagination. They got their rather cheesy ending and now I can explore the other characters.

Thank you so, so much, lovely. You really did not have to review all the chapters but they have been a joy to read. They've made me think and sit down and analyse my own writing and characters. I simply love when a review makes me do that and seven of them...well, I'm lucky.

Thank you, again.


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