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Review:ravenclaw_princess says:
Aww, that was so sad. You showed all their love and then you broke it all apart in an instant. It was all so tragic.

I love your use of unknown characters in this story as it heightens the theme of being just a name and a few words in the paper. Not knowing much about them and without the emotional connection to more well known characters, the whole point of dying and being but a name for other to read works well. You also slipped their story very well into the canon aspects which I liked.

The narrative of this story was quite effective. It is quite detached from real life, if that makes sense, I kind of felt when reading that I was watching everything from a far, yet every moment and every emotion clearly comes through. I felt connected somewhat to Ben and Grace and immersed in their love, yet I did not know them at all.

Flow was lovely. At first the shorter sections bothered me a little but as the story moved on you could see them as short snapshots in time. the use of quite short, succint sentence was also very effective at showing how quick and decicive life can be.

I loved the imagry of the Phoenix flower, it again showed the cycle of life, that while it may seem to be over, it really does keep on going on. It was a nice constant throughout the story.

The whole story was very well written. You created a beautiful atmosphere full of emotions. It was a wonderful read.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I felt as though using unknown characters would work better for this case - for instance, all we know about Benjy is that he was in the Order and all they ever found was pieces of him, which sort of struck me.

I'm glad the shorter sections ended up working - it was a bit of a weird set up, but after a while I got more used to writing like that. It was fun haha :P

The phoenix flower was my original inspiration - the rest of the story was really born from it :) Thank you so much for the kind words!

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