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Review:LilyFire says:
It's a good plot, and I think you have a lot of potential with this story, though I do have a bit of advice, if you want it.

First thing is instead of the headers (Teddy's POV, Tori's POV) you could use a * and it wouldn't break the readers concentration. You've done well enough that you can sorta tell that it's a new speaker anyway.

Another thing to tell you is maybe quite saying what happened and show it? Like here:
"He moved forward until I was pressed against a wall" could have had more to it. Something like: "My back hit the wall as his hand moved to my waist."

But I thought the story was really cute :) You've done a good job with it. Keep up the writing!
~Lily

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! And yes, I;m always up for advice! Yeah, I try different ways to head them all the time, I can't find a way that works for me yet, that doesn't look silly.

Thanks for the advice though, I can always use it!


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