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Review:wenderbender says:
Okay, first things first...your chapter image is AWESOME. And giving me nightmares. Who knew purple, animated eyes could be so freaky?

Moving right along, the mystery in this story is really drawing me in. I don't trust Annabel one little bit. She's sneaky, she's sly, she's powerful...frankly, I'm still supporting the theory that she's not a student at all, but some kind of imposter. I retract my initial view that she cast some spell on Sirius though. It seems like whatever power she has over him works all the time, so probably not a Confundus charm or the effects of legilimens...

I really don't have many suggestions, I think this chapter is just about perfect. Don't worry for a second about making Sirius more believable--you've done a great job with him. We're catching him at an unusual moment, when he's all confused and tangled up because of Anabel, and I think you capture his dazed state perfectly. You also do an excellent job of having him and his friends compare him to his "normal" self, so reader has a pretty clear idea about what he's like the majority of the time too.

My final point is that I'm curious about your little subplot of Sirius having a crush on Lily. It's a great detail that adds a lot of depth and realism to Sirius' interactions with his friends.

Looking forward to the next chapter! Again, please rerequest!

xoxo wenderbender

Author's Response: Haha, I had a lot of fun making that image! I'm glad I've got such a positive feedback on it!

I like hearing your theories. I actually haven't worked out that part yet. I have a couple ways I could go with her character. I'll probably make a last minute decision when I get to that point. :P

Thank you for the review, once again! I really appreciate it!

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