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Review:Noblevyne says:
I think this is just lovely. The flow, even if a little confusing is never jarring, because the words are all so elegantly put together.

I usually enjoy the stream of conciousness style of writing when done well, and I think it works well given the subject matter - death is maelstrom of emotion I'd imagine. Even if you don't believe in anything beyond this world - just those dying nerves and brain cells firing off all together.

I've always thought it particularly tragic that both Tonks and Remus left their son to fight, like he was secondary to them. Tonks knew how big of a risk it was and yet she still went after Remus, I like how you touched on that here.

Author's Response: The confusion is always an unfortunate side-effect of attempting the stream of consciousness style, but the flow is definitely more important to capture, and I'm very glad that I did. The problem with writing about death is trying to imagine what it would be like, and that's impossible to do - like you said, the brain would be so full of everything, all of life vanishing forever, that headless chicken syndrome. Maelstrom of emotion is the best way to describe it, and I suppose in that light, it does suit the stream of consciousness style. There's no other way to describe it realistically, or at least as close to realism as one can imagine.

I think the thing that bothered me most about Tonks's portrayal in DH was that she did leave her son to follow Remus. It didn't follow the pattern of other mothers within the series, all of whom seemed so closely connected with their children, whereas Tonks is first and foremost an Auror, I suppose. Either that or she placed her love for Remus above that for Teddy, and that seems too selfish for Tonks. It's something that has bothered me, and I wanted to explore it a bit in this story. I'm glad that you liked the inclusion of it - it's a touchy topic, and I wasn't sure that I'd handled it with enough sensitivity.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story. Going through your review has made me think deeply about the style and how I dealt with the characters within that style - it was a hard story to write, both in its emotional pull and in keeping the style in control. It means a lot that you enjoyed it. ^_^


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