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Review:BrightStar says:
Hi, BrightStar here with your review!

Coherence: 2nd person narrative is always confusing, but you really pulled it off! No problems with spelling and grammar, well done!

Characters: I liled Rose for her perseverence, and loved scorpius. He was slightly different than how he is normally written. i adored there platonic relationship, though i like how you left it open so it could happen between them :D

Context: Excellent - very much post-war societry, especially about the malfoys

credibility: so realistic, i never think of anyone excpet from teddy/victoire but this was bound to happen with at least one other weasley girl. i love the affect the breakup had on the family.

REally enjoyed this, well done!

Author's Response: Hey BrightStar,

Second person was always a favourite of mine to read but I only started to write it recently. I think it works best with certain characters who like to brood more than most. Not many people do it, but when it's attempted, it's done really well (at least from what I've read).

The basis behind this story was a bit personal. I'm sure some people go through this sort of stuff but not everyone has the guts to say 'hey, let me do this and see if it's worth it.' It's not just that they can get a relationship out of it but it's a learning experience at the same time. Next time she's in a similar spot, she wouldn't be so weary of the outcome. That's not to say that the experience wouldn't be a painful one either.

I loved writing Scorpius. I agree, he's different from how most author's portray him but it's a nice change. I like seeing him as the silent type instead of the hot one that struts around and smirks...mind you, this one smirks too :p

There were several possibilities here. And yeah, I left it open for that same reason, either her and Ted would work out and/or she'd finally find out why she couldn't understand the universe's decision to choose him.

Ted/Victoire wasn't something that was set in stone though many people ran with it. Again, the possibilities are endless.

Thank you so much for reviewing! I appreciate it :)

- Lia


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