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Review:NeverGotHerLetter says:
This was lovely. Really, really refreshing. I loved that you kept changing the Point Of View throughout the entire story, and that Remus acted exactly how Tonks expected him too ^_^ It made their relationship sound more mature and believable that Tonks knew exactly how he'd react. Also, I liked how you called Tonks "Dora" as that outlined the fact that it wasn't in First Person, and also it made me think of like Tonks' mother or father, like they were telling the story.
I think you should slow it down a little bit, maybe add more speech rather than just an inner monolouge. Or you could do the "Giving Birth" Scene or like "Nine Months Later" or something like that, just to give more info :D
There was like one spelling mistake; Near the beginning you say she "dropped four plats" or something about a Plat ^_^ So just correct that and this story shall be completely and perfectly epic, rather than just completely epic :D

Author's Response: I'm glad that you thought it was refreshing. Thank you! I'm glad you loved that I kept changing the point of view and the fact that the relationship sounded more believable. I hadn't actually thought of that. I like the idea that it was one of her parents talking, like watching over her almost. Very interesting point of view!

Hmmm that is a good idea too. I was thinking of expanding on it but wasn't sure what to do so I will keep your ideas in mind thank you!

Thank you for the lovely review ^^

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