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Review:lia_2390 says:
Most stories that I've read which feature Teddy and Victoire describe them as this perfect couple but your story here has turned that notion completely on its head. There, obviously a lot of dysfunction that we as readers don't see, for Teddy tends to drift in Molly's direction.

One thing that stuck out to me in the last chapter is that she didn't ask him what happened that he was drunk and in tears. Yes, she didn't want to ruin the flow of what could've happened but seriously? What's also interesting is that it's the girls who are in tears and vulnerable and eventually find themselves in those sorts of situations. (Well, in what I've read anyway). Not one of her finer moments but I suppose it was a catalyst of sorts. Sorry I didn't mention this in the last review, I only thought about it when I read this chapter.

Now they've pretty much jumped in to the middle of the pool and the forbidden nature of the entire situation hasn't at all lost its appeal. The thing is...people always find out, as they learnt later. It was a bit funny how he walked in with the words dying on his lips while several expletives probably rolled through his mind.

I really felt bad for Victoire because she genuinely didn't know. I knew they found it a bit funny that she was so naive but really, no one wants to think that these sorts of things would happen to them. I was a bit disappointed too that she really didn't have a clue. I agree with her though, Molly was a bit of a coward. At least it's all in the open now.

She knows he made the right decision. She just isn't sure who it was right for. - I like this line. It makes me get all philosophical...who determines what's the right thing in any situation? As it turns out, his decision (Yeah, I read the other chapters before I reviewed this one) wasn't right for either of them.

- Lia

Author's Response: I definitely agree with you on that. I didn't want this to make Molly into the bad girl for being the third wheel. I think quite often the sympathy comes for the girl (or guy) who is cheated on rather than the one who cheats and sometimes, just sometimes, there is justifiable reason to support the other party. Whilst Molly isn't entirely blameless, I think much of it falls on Teddy in the course of his story. If he was stronger, if he just finished it, it would all work out much quicker.

That's a really good point and I'm glad you raised it. I think that's a turning point in Molly's character. Where before, she would probably not have taken advantage of him in the way she did, now she's getting to a point where she recognises what she's feeling. She knows that she could be in love with him and there's this emptiness and loneliness and horrible lust towards him. She completely takes advantage here of a drunk, upset, almost manic Teddy and for me, it balances the two out as...well, not very nice people!

Absolutely! I could hear Teddy's brain whirring as I wrote it and reread it. It's a very vivid moment for me, when he walks in on them. Where Molly didn't lose her cool at Victoire's apperance in the previous chapter, Teddy absolutely does here. She's a far better liar, ultimately!

She didn't and she is terribly naive (I know someone just like her, in that respect). I'm really not sure that she's too observant or even that she'd contemplate her cousin being the one that he seeks solace and company in. Perhaps she had concerns about there being another woman but I'm not sure she'd ever have considered it to be Molly. That's the main shock.

I like that line too. It came very naturally to finish off the chapter and it always makes me think. Again, he made the right decision in terms of what he is supposed to do but completely the wrong decision for all three of them now that they're embroiled in this situation.

Thank you so, so much for five such wonderful reviews. I'm so glad that you're enjoying the story, lovely. It really means the world.


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