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Review:psychee says:
Hello!

This is psychee from the forums, leaving the review you have requested! :) Before I start to comment on the actual story, I would like to express my admiration for your beautiful banner. It's incredibly eye-catching and I couldn't help but admire it.

Having said that, I would like to say that I really like the whole concept of your story, your original character being Sirius's daughter. Even though there was nothing serious between him and Monica's mother, I like the fact that he left a daughter behind, even if I'm sure that he doesn't even know she exists. This is quite a twist - Monica's mother being a muggle, Sirius being involved with her and then leaving her without a word, having no idea that she was pregnant. I would love to find out how they met, their whole story.

This chapter also managed to raise a lot of questions: Does Dumbledore truly think that Sirius had nothing to do with James and Lily's death? Has he got any proof?

I'm looking forward to seeing what will happen next. The plot is intriguing and so different from all the Sirius-centered or Sirius had a child stories I have read. I'm glad you decided to request, because I had the opportunity to read such a promising story. I didn't notice any spelling/grammar or punctuation mistakes as I was reading this chapter but, then again, I'm not all that good at noticing those, unless they are too many and too serious to miss.

You asked if the story was interesting. For me, it was very interesting. The idea is fresh, the characters are interesting and realistic until now and the main plot leaves the reader wanting to come back for more. So you're off a good start.

Good luck with your future chapters! ^^

-psychee

Author's Response: I just want to say, thank you so much for this lengthy review! I absolutely love seeing them, and I am so glad I requested from you :)
It's good to hear that you find it interesting, I was trying hard to capture the reader and leave them with questions so that they wanted more.
The story between Monica's mother and Sirius is something I really love. I have actually written a one-shot about how they met, and I might post it later on. Or maybe incorporate it somehow. There is some history between them, but complicated.
And thanks about the banner, I honestly have to thank the designer on that one, SahiraLupin. I just told her what I wanted and she came back with that beautiful. Previously this story was in two parts, and the banner was used for the sequel, and I had another for the prequel. Out of the two I just had to use it.
Thank you so much for the fabulous review!
~Alex


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