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Review:Kaykay says:
Hey!! Back again!! :D
I just read the reply to my last review and it made me smile!! I'm really your new favourite reader!? :3

Well I'm going to attempt a review of chapters 14 to 18 but I may have forgotten some things XD

Firstly, it's about time that she found out about Remus!! She really isn't good with puzzles!! I quite liked the fact that the fact that she was awful at puzzles was thrown in at the start (maybe chapter 1?) in a joking manner but it was brought up later in a serious way. Most writers say things about their characters and think that they can get away with changing them completely when what they said no longer fits. Either you plan very far in advance or you're incredibly good at memorising your characters XD

"I'll have you know Malfoy that I've helped in creating half the plays that defeated the other teams. I have more talent in my pinky than you contain in your entire being, you little toe-rag."
That line was pure brilliance!! And she punched him in the face and kicked him in the groin!! I love her!! XD

I loved the Slug party! I was curious about that frog spawn though... Haha XD Avery's little scene with Sirius was getting quite steamy :o And that Peter clearly wants her!! And Lily didn't seem as crazy which I liked!! Those Slytherins have to die though... It's annoying cause I know they won't any time soon XD

Aw she went over for Christmas!! :3 The little scene in the snow was so sweet!! And I thought it was funny how Sirius felt like an idiot for getting her earrings XD

I enjoyed the new year chapter. Most stories tend to skip over the fact that their characters do in fact have parents and the bit with her dad was sweet :] I also have to say that drunk Sirius is hysterical!! And I love how Avery works herself into such a panic over little things! When Sirius asked her to help him look for a house I couldn't stop laughing XD

"His cheeks turned an even brighter shade of red as he looked down and I looked down at his-oh my..."
This also had me howling like a banshee XD as did...
"Oh um, bathtubs remind me of a womb."
I can't believe she slept in the bath!! My friend that I mentioned in the last review (the one that Avery reminds me of) actually sat in her bath in a huff cause she couldn't get into her bed and was shouting things like "I'll just sleep here then!" XD

And you've peaked my curiosity about Sirius and this Polyjuice Potion... What is that boy up to!? :o

Phew... I think I'm done for now... I think I covered everything, haha XD Now for chapter 19!

I'm seriously loving this!!

x Kayleigh x

Author's Response: Oh wow! Hello again! So wonderful to see you and your lovely reviews gracing my page once again : )

Haha yes it took a bit of time to find out about Remus, but he was quite good at hiding it so I think that it would take anyone quite a bit of time to figure out that he gets a bit wolfy :P I'd like to think I'm really intuned with Avery and I do remember the puzzle bit, which is just kind of how her life flows in general. As in, she's a smart girl, but a bit dense when it comes to certain things.

Glad you liked the Malfoy revenge, much needed, I think :) And the slug club party was probably my most eventful chapter. So much was going on and I'm glad you liked it. And there's a lot more sexual tension to come with Avery/Sirius.'

I'm glad you liked the new years! I know it's overdone them throwing a party and getting drunk but I thought this was just a funny chapter and great way to introduce Avery's parents. Glad you liked and appreciated it :)

And seriously I must've met your friend Gwen or something because if she's done stuff like that...haha that's so crazy! I hope you read that part to her as well :P

And you'll find out what happens with Sirius and the polyjuice potion very soon :) Hope you like the rest! Can't wait for another lovely review from you : ) I love you X100!

~Lauren

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