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Review:Olympia1863 says:
I like this, I really do.

I like Joan, a lot actually. For one, I like the name you chose - names are important, and Joan is elegant and yet not altogether feminine or unusual. I like that from the start we have a pretty clear view that although she is the object of our other main character's affections, she's not perfect, and maybe not even deserving? Another review mentioned some Mary-Sue-ish ness, which I guess I could see. But at the same time I understand what you were doing in the second chapter - trying to convey to the reader the way the boys saw her, not as she actually was. Humans romanticize people by nature, and when writing a perspective it's absolutely essential to convey their perceptions. I think it was done quite lovely, actually. I love that she plays guitar and likes the Strokes because A) the Strokes are excellent and B) I think it adds a really interesting element to her character. I feel like the interest in muggle music probably, if anything, would make her far less popular at Hogwarts, where it seems like the Weird Sisters reign supreme.

I really enjoyed Lysander and Lorcan as well... I got the impression that their are definitely their mother's sons, though perhaps Lysander isn't so much as Lorcan is? Maybe I read too far into that (that's nothing new, haha).

James was interesting. He seems like he has a bit of a spoiled boy streak, what with mentioning how he always had everything first... but otherwise he's likeable. He seems like he's his father if his father hadn't had the whole 'evil wizard who wants him dead on his back 24/7' thing going on during his school years.

Scorpius are a bit harder to get a sense of, but that's mostly because his major appearance so far was pretty Joan-centric (as it had to be for the exposition). But I'm pretty sure you'll get to that soon enough. Hopefully in the next chapter, hopefully posted soon?! :D

- Elle

Author's Response: :O
That review is too long and too awesome, my heart shall forever be mushy inside because you're so... wow.

Why are you such a spot-on judge on characters, I read your review and constantly went, "I know! Exactly!"? Except for the James part, because it's actually Albus :P

If you want to read the 3rd chapter (very predictably in Scorpius' point of view), you can check it out on FFN. I go by the name "Skyleidoscope" on it.

It has a sort of cliffy ending to it, though. Just a slight warning. Not that I'm going to edit it in HPFF and make the chapter end in a non-cliffy way. Hehe


P.S.: Yep, the bet/game starts in chapter 3. I'd love to hear what you think about it! :)

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