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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there again, love. Again, I thank you for asking for reviews because it just gives me the opportunity as a reader to get more exposure and read more characters, different plots, different eras, and be exposed to more original ideas.

So I basically rambled last review about how I wasn't sure how to feel or approach Sandy and Lysander's relationship because it felt so negative and so hostile toward one another. Now I don't take it back but this chapter definitely helped me to be understand as a reader. If I hadn't had this chapter to read after the last one, I can say with pretty confident assurance that I would not have come back to read the story because the first chapter was so off putting for me.

I don't think that your writing is off as much as organization. I would pay more attention to how you sequence things and remember that we as the readers are not in your head and do have the minor details and history that you have decided about a couple of characters that may not be included in the story. Be wary of this and be ready to overprepare the reader for what is going on in your head.

I didn't notice any major typos or issues in this chapter.

Also, you called this chapter a filler, but I think that this is the most important chapter I've read because it provides such important background to really understanding the entire dynamic of the story.

LMW

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