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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there, again, love. I hope everything is going well and that you are having a good weekend. I was definitely curious to read the first chapter.

And I think you set up the reader to expect what Sandreiah expected from Lysander and I was quite shocked by their fight. I think that for a first chapter, you sent the reader right into a place of not being able to really understand why Lysander and Sandy were friends in the first place much less dating.

Your fight was harsh and mean, and I just couldn't understand what attracted them to each other because I had nothing to compare it to. You didn't even give us, like, a flashback or a preparation for why they are friends or why they were dating. It is clear that they are passionate, but I'm just not understanding the dynamic between them.

You didn't have many issues; just some minor punctuation issues where it needs to be added with dialogue and such.

For the future, I'm just not quite sure where the story is going to go or how you're going to reference back to Sandy and Lysander's previous relationship but it is just a very negative relationship in my mind. My other concern is that you refer to your main character as Sandreiah, Sandra, and Sandy; I don't have issues with Sandreiah or Sandy, but Sandra seem misplaced to me. Those are just some minor points though.

LMW

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