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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there again, love, I got your request and I was intrigued to see what it was about. I am glad to read something else and see what else you have written and what other styles you like to do.

So I was giggling to see that you wrote a next generation story about Draco and Roxi's children. I must say that I was impressed by that because it definitely shows a real commitment to your characters and how much you believe in them. And I think that it was brave of you to attempt to do a genre that isn't really your normal or an era that you are the most comfortable in.

My youíre a persistent lot...-- this was the only issue I really saw grammatically; I would just add a coma after my because it just seems like she is saying My, (long pause) before she decides to continue her story. And a comma would relay a long pause for the reader. This is a super nitpicky point but I just think it would make her sort of monologue more powerful by just allowing the reader to really understand her voice.

I think that you did a good job creating a believable character and so far, I don't see any signs of Mary Sue or any other major cliches; for her to be after a Scamander was definitely an original point and using Roxanne seems to be a good idea as well. I think that you are overall setting up a successful story. Because we can all relate to the on again, off again couple because we have been in that relationship or know of one.

Good job for the prologue.


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