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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there,
Well you certainly managed to make this an intense chapter but I can't help but agree generally with all the points you were making in ths chapter. This is an inncident I believe was mentioned once or wtice in the books and I know that other writers have taken this whole idea and begun to play with it and how it affected the rest of the Maraduers and such.

I think that you are doing a good job keeping everyone in character; James' reaction seems to be plausible in my mind as well as Snape's. Snape does seem a bit eager to worm himself out of trouble; I think that he would be a bit more calculating so maybe somehow you could relay the difference in your writing.

Your chapter are extraordinarily long, I think, for the type of story you are pursuing; I think it'd be more effective as being split up or something like that. But that's just my major opinion.

I think that overall, I feel like I'm reading seperate one-shots more than actualy chapters simploy because each chapter seems like it could just stand on its own.

LMW

Author's Response: Yea I know a lot of writers have written about this event; just figured I'd try. I always figured Snape would try to worm his way out of it, but it would be in character to write him more calculating. I've always written long chapters and I have heard that before that they are a bit too long...Thanks again for reviewing

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