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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there again, love, with your requested reviews. It has definitely been an honor and pleasure of mine to be able to read this for you and be able to review tonight. I had the free time and totally wanted to be able to do this. Because the story seemed very interesting to me when you requested it.

And I think that this second chapter took us to a very naturally flowing fearful reaction of a Mom even Lily. James was pretty scare as he was having the seizure on the floor. And I also felt for all the kids especially Dom because she was the eldest that had to really witness her closest friend/near brother do that before being left to keep track of the younger cousins.

As for them getting to the hospital and revealing the truth about Harry still being in the limelight was a very smart way for you to add some insight about the Potter family as we know them now. And I also liked the other little details that you sprinkled throughout the chapter.

I felt bad for James as he was so weak and tried to so hard; his crying was very good to see. It totally made him vulnerability to me as a character and believable because I think that even a really manly son would have gripped for his mother or for his father, whomever was closer.

I'm also enjoying that you added Harry and Ginny talking into the last of this chapter. I found it all sweet and wonderful to read about. Their relationship is very believable in my mind and I think you did a good job keeping them both in character.

I'm curious about all the electronics, of whether or not, they'd be okay in a magical world and how they'd work. Also I'm curious about whether or not you need to captalize Healer because I thought JKR did that in her books.

Just a couple of points to think about.

LMW

Author's Response: Okay! Thanks! That is all very helpful and things I will take into consideration.

Thank you so much for reviewing this story. You really have been a great help, and I would love to see your criticism on the future chapters. :)

Thanks so much! :)


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