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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there, love, final chapter and I have to say that I haven't been very disappointed with this story. I was a bit hesistant just because Sirius/OC stories have turned into such huge cliches for me but I really just enjoy your writing style, I think.

I also find Elsa to be this breath of fresh air as far as OCs go because she just seems like the kind of girl I could potentially be friends with. I would like to be friends with her in real life and spend time getting to know her better.

I also love that you had her brother attack her. I know it sounds cruel but I think it adds this real dynamic to the story. Now I want to know what changed over the summer for her and why she is fearful she'll turn into him. I also liked that her 'betrothed' was unhappy about the whole situation. You also used the potions and Hospital Wing wisely. It was believable and a very neatly added dramatic twist that I could totally see possible.

Well done on all accounts with this chapter!

LMW

Author's Response: Thanks again. Yes, writing Sirius/OC is tricky and dangerous and can become boring and cliche. When I set out to write this, I wanted to avoid those cliches. Some, I am sure, will be unavoidable, but some I make sure to avoid like the plague lol.

I don't want people to read my character and go "she's too perfect" or "she's a mary sue" or what have you. To me, she is a normal human being who has her flaws. She struggles with school work, and family and her friends. She doesn't have everything go her way, but she excels at certain things (potions & quidditch).

Dominic's character (while scary) is what makes the story a little more interesting to me. He's fun to write, and adds a bit of flare to the chapters he's in.

Thanks for the reviews, and I hope you won't mind if I come and request more.

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