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Review:LovelyMioneWeasley says:
Hi there again, love. It was definitely another lovely chapter to read about. I found it definitely impressive that you were able to transition so nicely between each of the scenes you'd written about. They were all kind of stand on there own but you figured out a way to sail smoothly between each one.

I also loved the mentioning and including of other Pureblood families like the Crouchs. It is a reminder to the readers and probably the truth that JKR wanted readers to realize: Not all Purebloods were automatically put into the house of Slytherin. I imagine quite a few of them (beyond Sirius and James, of course) were Hufflepuffs and Ravenclaws. Well done on that point.

I also liked the idea with the Amorentina. The only issue I had was lack of Evans. I would be more curious to see how Slughorn interacted with her or even mentioning James trying to catch Lily's attention. I think it would have added an extra layer to the chapter, a side detail that would help the reader really get into the story and all elements of this era because we do know it as the Maraduers era; let's have all the elements of it.

Well done otherwise.

LMW

Author's Response: Thanks. Transitions can be tricky and sometimes not done very well. It is something I struggle with, but I'm glad you think I did a good job with it.

I can't see every single pureblood family ending up in Slytherin. It's just not logical. There had to be a few who ended up in the other houses. Though, I'd imagine more in Ravenclaw than Hufflepuff, but that's not to say they won't end up where they belong. You never know where the Sorting Hat'll put you.

I'm afraid for a while Lily doesn't play a huge role in the novel because Elsa and her aren't friends. More of acquaintances who have a slow developing friendship. She will come along eventually.

Thanks for the review!


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