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Review:ilharrypotter says:
Hello there! Polkadot/ilharrypotter from the forums with your requested reviews.

Not going to lie to you, I've clicked on this story a couple of times - it's at the top of my list to be reviewed, but for some reason, I keep getting distracted. Therefore, I apologize for how long it's taken me to get to this.

Right away, I feel like this story has a lot of potential to be... cliche. With the family classes and that business. I don't want to be mean or judgemental so soon, but I'm hoping you will tilt /away/ from the danger zone on my cliche-o-meter as this chapter continues. A few cliched plotlines are all cool in my opinion, but one too many... we have a problem. Just commenting. I don't want to condemn your story so quickly - which is not what I'm doing, for sure!

"Slytherin tend to be with themselves that be friendly with one another."

This sentence doesn't seem to make any sense to me... if you're making revisions, try and fix that. And look for any other sentences that don't make sense. I'll keep an eye out too. :)

I like to see that you're making your Hogwarts students give Draco a lot of... well, hell. He's so often depicted as the Slytherin prince - before and after the war. To see him getting crap from all sides is refreshing and much more realistic, in my opinion!

When you end the chapter the way you do, "Please, not Malfoy." you just KNOW she's going to be paired with Malfoy... or at least we think. I dunno, really. I could be wrong. But the foreshadowing is a nice touch.

Your story has a lot of potential! I'm looking forward to watching it as it progresses. :)

-Paige.

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