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Review:FlaviaMalfoy says:
Loving the story so far. I agree with some other reviewers, there seems to be a serious lack when it comes to the use of magic. I understand that you stated that Draco turned his back on the Wizarding World, which I honestly find difficult to believe as its very OOC for him, but it makes for an interesting story. I like the fact he's still friends with Blaise, although Blaise seems a little OOC, even though in the books he isn't mentioned too much. The way you describe him in here reminds me of the black super hero friend in the Incredibles haha, which isn't a bad thing I guess.
But yes, I didn't understand why Hermionie couldn't just fix the curtain with magic. She seems pretty OOC if you ask me, but it could just be because its like ten years on from Hogwarts days.
Also I take it you're American as there are a lot of Americanisms in your story. One thing that kind of ticks me of about fanfics, a lot of American writers not familiar with British terms, which is not your fault. But I thought many things would be obvious, such as the fact that Draco would leave her 20 pounds, not dollars. You could also use the British slang of 20 quid if you wanted. Any Brit would know what you were talking about. I suggest looking up some common British terms and slang to make the story more real and relateable, especially to us British readers haha.
Didn't mean to nitpick, just some pointers.
Other than that, loving the story, can't wait to finish it! Thanks for all the time and effort you put into it!

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