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Review:CrazyForYou says:
Haha cute way to end this story! I think it's really interesting because it covers a lot of different moods. At the same time, I felt like the middle/end became kind of off the wall.

You had a couple of errors, but no big deal. One I saw was: “She fell for you're scrawny pale ass back in seventh year" -- Should be "your" scrawny pale ass.

Lily's characterization is sweet and James at the end is adorable. I wasn't sure about the Marauders. Sirius's prank seemed really insane, especially because they were in a war. It struck me as slightly odd that he would even suggest staging a kidnapping when they were actually happening.

That being said, I think this one shot had a nice balance of sweet. fun, humorous and generally realistic. The alcohol bit at the beginning seemed borderline alcoholism because James was drinking by himself, drowning in his sorrows. Not the best start...but he sort of redeemed himself.

I was slightly confused at the end as to why James was so confused. I know he was stunned, but why hadn't he woken up earlier?

Overall, sweet and funny one-shot. I think you have interesting interpretations of the characters that attempts to maintain the silly side of the Marauders even as they grow older. I appreciate that, even if I'm unsure about the level of pranks.

Nicely done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review - you definitely gave me a lot to think about (thanks for the spelling bit first - I do tend to have a problem with hyphenations in this story, no clue why).

I did recognized Sirius' farfetched-ness at that part, as well as how ignorant his suggestion would be - but I was also trying to reference the fact that the Sirius in my head, well - the younger Sirius would generally come up with ideas that, at best, others would find highly inappropriate. Namely, I was also thinking along the lines that this was the same guy who thought it was appropriate to send a fellow student - abeit one he highly disliked - into a trap were a werewolf waited for him at the end. So that's what was trying to go through my mind when he made that particular off-colored suggestion - I really appreciate the comment though and it will be something that I think about in future stories.

Honestly, as to why he was so confused at the end - I think that, yes, he would have woken up occasionally while his friends were trying to 'set things up' but in order to keep him 'going along with it', Sirius probably would have had no quams about stunning him another two of three times - and, combined with his earlier unfeeling/grogginess, he'd be left out of the loop for a bit. It is another thing to think about though.

Thank you so much for such an honest review - I'm thrilled that you like it, and that you've given me things to think about for other stories and comedic attempts in the near future. I really appreciated what you had to share and what you thought!

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