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Review:DemetersChild says:
I love this, I really do. Being able to see the transfer of Xeno's affections is really brilliant. He wants to be right for his girlfriend, he wants to be perfect and "enough". But at the same time Capri just captivated him so easily.

It's a beautiful love story, so far, and a I can't wait to finish it.

I'm really enjoying both Xeno and Capri's personalities even more than in the first chapter. It's just so obvious that they fit together. She is very carefree and I love that about her. And his curiosity and admiration for life is wonderful.

I think that I might get rid of the italics for the flashback. They aren't really necessarily. It flows perfectly without them. It's more of Xeno thinking about that moment while he's sitting there at dinner than some sort of back story that needs explaining. The italics just breaks the flow of the story.

I'm really enjoying this story. It's unique and interesting and very well written. I'll definitely be finishing this one.

Magically Yours,

Dem

Author's Response: Thank you for pointing out the italics. I agree they are unnecessary. I'll keep that in mind while editing (when I'm done being lazy :P).

And thank you for another lovely review. You're far too nice!


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