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Review:DemetersChild says:
Hello there! DemetersChild here from the forums. So sorry for such a long wait on this review!

This is beautiful fic. It's completely believable. I felt as if I were reading something JKR wrote herself. The characters were perfect and scenes flowed so easily.

There were a few places in the beginning that were a bit redundant. The first paragraph mentions that she looked at the clock a hundred times, twice. Then when they're sitting on the couch and Rose mentions her father, Scorpius did two things "quickly" in the same sentence. Perhaps get rid of one or replace it with something to help it flow better.

I really loved this, though. I had chills quite a few times. I felt so sorry for Hermione, Rose, and Scorpius when Ron kicked them out. I'm glad Hermione remained her usual tempered self. And that Ron was still quite frightened of her.

It was such a beautiful thing to write about, too: the reuniting of a broken family. And a happy ending, which is always lovely. :D

Good work!

Magically Yours,

Dem

Author's Response: Don't worry yourself a bit about the time - I'm glad you even got around to it at all! :D

Your compliments really make me blush, and I don't blush all that easy. :3 I have changed the things you've suggested (can't imagine why I haven't spotted them before!) and I'm really grateful you pointed them out.

Thank you so much for leaving me such a lovely review - I really, really appreciate it!


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