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Review:Mintleaf says:
Hello there!

I absolutely love stumbling across good founders fics! It's such an interesting era! :)

I love the dynamic you created in the Ravenclaw family. Helena's father acting as a mediator between mother and daughter creates an excellent premise for the deterioration of their relationship when he dies. You've set the scene so well there!

I noticed one or two little typos. 'that could possibly outside the door' - I think maybe you're missing the word 'be' (I'm awfully tired at the moment so I could be reading that line wrong though haha). Also, 'How does removing ever memory of him' - every memory?

The dialogue was also fantastic! It seems appropriate to the era, which is probably quite difficult when writing Founders. I also thought all the little details you included (like Helena gripping the table/spreading her fingers across the table) drew out so much more emotion, which was lovely, and made the story much more enjoyable. Also, the little details like Rowena wearing blue were subtle and gave the story more familiarity, which I guess is another thing that's hard to do with Founders fics.

I presume the 'young baron' is the one we're all familiar with? Anyway, I'm very interested to see where this progresses! Great chapter :)

Author's Response: thank you so much!

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