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Review:jman7693 says:
This was written fantastically. The concision of the style of this one-shot is perfect. The words flow together easily, the diction sets an accurate mood for the reader, and the vague descriptions create a brilliant picture of how Molly would really be visualizing and digesting the horror that is unfurling around her.

All in all, I really loved this little one-shot. For a first fan-fic, it's actually rather excellent, though it is quite apparent that you've been writing for a long time. I'm glad you decided to strike an interest in HP fanfic! It really is lovely and fascinating and extremely fun. :D

As for the ending, I like it the way it is now, yet if you did decide you wanted to add the battle between Molly and Bellatrix, I don't suppose it would hurt anything. Either way, it's a great story giving insight and perspective to Molly, who rarely gets the honor of having a story all to herself.

I'm favoriting this. I think it's brilliant. :D
And I have nothing else to critique - it's an excellent one-shot!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking the time to review this!

Yeah, I've been writing different things for a while though never completing them. What I like about fan fiction is that I have to finish them!

OK, I guess I'll contemplate more on whether or not I'll expand on the ending.

Thank you again for reading and for your fantastically awesome words!

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