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Review:TheGoldenKneazle says:
Hi there! You requested a review off the forums :)

This was a really intense piece, and thought the feeling of insanity is very hard to manage if you want to get through to people, you managed it. Barty's insistence that he was never alone was like a mantra being drummed into me as you read it, and his absolute lack of care is scary, like all security has been taken away (which it has). It really shows us that we don't know anything any more, because if he, the captured, can be so sure of rescue, what is coming?

Barty's rock-solid assurance that he was never alone and of the highest intelligence were really the core of this piece - and it works really well. Because he is talking to Minerva so normally, it is very odd and again, scary, and that is what shows us how far he has come, and where his father comes in too. We know who he is from it, and we hate it, because it's easy to see where he's coming from.

Minerva is a very reassuring rock to hold on to, because she knows Barty too, but she's keeping her head - just. She works very well as the questioner, because she is angry, but is a bit scared too, which is worrying, because someone needs control of the uncontrollable Barty. She is the voice of reason, and the flashback with her works really well with her characterisation, because it shows us how far they have come together before they turned in different directions.

The ending was pretty shocking, and unexpected, because once he's caught you up in the flow of memories and assured company, it's very hard to remember what then happens even as it is described, like a bucket of water over the head, because it's just so wrong by this point to have Barty NOT unalone.

This was a really perfect one-shot about Barty. 10/10, deffo.
~TGK

Author's Response: TGK, I am SO sorry this took SO long to respond to! I apologize!

I am so glad that the insanity came through. It was really hard to write that into his thoughts, but after a while it became easier. I'm glad you thought it fit! YAY! That means a lot!

I'm glad also that you noticed my core thoughts when writing this piece. I really wanted him to come across as perfectly sane in some points, and then almost so sane that he was insane, which he was. Does that make any sense? lol. I'm also thrilled you thought I did Minerva justice. I was a little concerned about writing the contrast between her and Barty.

Woo! Surprise ending! YES! Exactly what I wanted!

Overall, I'm very thrilled you enjoyed it, and I'm grateful for every compliment you've left! Thank you!


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