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Review:justonemorefic says:
Oh Fred, that's so against the bro code. Tsk tsk.

Alyssa! That's her name. I suppose she was in the previous story as well? Humph her friends seem to be giving bad ideas, but she seems sensible enough. Was she spreading rumors about Marisol and James then?

I noticed some typos. "gapping" should be "gaping" and “I suppose your right.” should be "you're".

"Marisol and Evelyn then took turns explaining that they had found the Masquerade Girl and about Marisol and the Masquerade Girl’s argument. They left out the girl’s identity as Jazzy had a big mouth and the truth would be spread throughout the whole school by the next morning in no time if they told her." I thought this was an odd way to end the section, a little anticlimatic an awkwardly worded. I'd also think they wouldn't tell Jazzy at all, just in my own opinion. Those kinds of girls always have ways of getting the whole truth if they're given a little bit. Or that they'd be offended her friends wouldn't trust her.

And the plot thickens!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks for another fabulous review, Gina! And thanks for pointing out those typos, I'll have to go back over that when I dust this story back off and update it; it'll probably be after I've finished Why Not though as that story seems to be taking the front seat to everything else at the moment.

But nonetheless, I appreciate all the feedback you've given me on this story as it really has helped and I'm glad you're enjoying it. (:

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