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Review:thehyacinthgirl says:
You really don't see many one-shots or stories out there about Barty Crouch, Jr. I think that you did a very good job with this! At first, I was a bit confused as to where he was, but I soon cottoned on that this was whilst he was at Hogwarts not when he was in Azkaban.

As far as grammar, spelling, and syntax are concerned I didn't pick up on anything that needed mending, so kudos there! I always appreciate pieces that have that polished look to them.

As for your plot, I liked it. In essence and as a whole, it might seem rather simple, but collectively it was really rather nicely done; in my humble opinion.

Your characterizations of Minerva and Barty were rather spot on, me thinks. I really rather enjoyed this tale despite Barty's depravity and Minerva's obvious disgust and despair. I imagine that one would feel terribly for a person who had wasted their talent like Barty had.

Then the part with Barty and Fudge, that was just downright spooky thanks to the Dementor. I was more than a bit annoyed in the books when that happened, and I was outraged here, as well.

I know that Barty Jr. was an atrocious person, but now he could never account for all the things he had done as Dumbledore said.

& I loved the transformation of Barty to It. Because as soon as he lost his soul he became nameless, emotionless, empty. I loved that his eyes just went blank and unseeing because I would imagine something like that would happen after one's soul has been ripped from their body.

Absolutely wonderful job with this one-shot!


Linders

Author's Response: Linders, I am SO sorry that this took forever to reply to!

First off, thank you so much for your review! It made me smile, so so so so much! Such a fantastic first review! I'm actually glad you were outraged! Haha. That's how I sort of wanted emotion to get across; if I can make my readers feel something, anything at all, then I've accomplished everything in the world.

The Dementor kiss was probably one of the hardest things I've ever written. I was really stumped on how to write it for the longest time. I just couldn't figure out how to convey a soulless character across when everything was based off of him, and it was from his point of view, pretty much. The transformation to It was necessary, I felt. I felt like there was no other way to write that sort of thing, you know?

Thank you so very very much, Linders! :)


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