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Review:TheGoldenKneazle says:
Hi there! So you requersted a review on the forums :)

Ok, I have to admit that this is one of the best murder mysteries I have seen in a long time.Everyone had cards stacked against them, and it was pretty much impossible to tell who was the actual murderer until Teddy said "You and James are the only aurors who've done their job". Until that point, I suspected first Roxanne - because of the talk with Ted about Vic - and then James, because everything was against him. Even when he and Roxanne were in the treehouse, I still had no idea! The only slight giveaway was that there was no Teddy POv where he said how upset he was Vic had died - it would have put him out of the equation more effectively for it to be a real surprise at the end.

Ths suspense that was built up worked very very well. Roxanne looking over the papers several times kept the fear very alive, as well as them all wondering a bit about who it was out of them; their conflicts (James vs Teddy on serial killer) and personal problems with Vic all made the situation more tense, especially when all three were angry to be cut out of the investigation after Vic's death. That just made it all the more urgent and heartfelt.

The details, that you disregarded at first but then revisited - like James interviewing Roxanne at MacNair's scene, and Ted interviewing the apothecist, were really cleverly woven in with the descriptive paragraphs. It gave you a really good feel for what the situation was like but also made you suspicious and anxious about what would turn out to be prime evidence next!

The characterisation of Ted, James and Rox was really great, because they all acted frustrated about each death, and angry turned upset about Victoire. We saw their relationships with each other, and how they related to the other aurors, which really put you in their place and made the reader worried about the outcome again!

Overall, this is fantastic. I hope your sequel goes well! If it's anything like this, It'll be amazing. 10/10.
~TGK

Author's Response: Oh my goodness. What a lovely review!! Seriously, thank you so much!

It's been ages since I've looked at this story and hearing a new reader's perspective is really helpful for the formatting and such for the sequel (And the Wind Blows) which will be posted in the next few weeks when I finish writing it. :D

I'm glad that both the suspense and the details worked in tandem with one another. I feel like without them working effectively, the mystery portion of this story wouldn't be, well, mysterious. :P

Thank you so much for your review! If you don't mind I'll be requesting reviews for the sequel when the time comes.
-melissa


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