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Review:S. Greengrass says:
I liked this introductory chapter.
Very, very good. You can picture it in your mind and the emotions in it are powerful, but yet they feel exactly in the right place and not too over the top. They are just perfectly accurate and flow easily, like I think you meant it to be like to us readers xD

You do have a few typos (I'm sorry to point it out; I get so 'bah, I should have seen that before posting! D:' when someone tells something like this to me. Anyhow, I hope you don't mind. And if you do, I'm so sorry :x)

Like here:
Paragraph 3 "not matter how much he wanted them too". I think you meant 'no matter how much he wanted them to.'
And here:
"She looks at her hands, so white and pale and fragile. Now that he looks at her, she is fragile. She may have been strong once, but now she is fragile. Breakable. Too be handled with care." Again, I think you meant 'To be handled with care.' (Yes, I lost my count on the paragraphs, because I'm silly like that xD)

The last one I noticed (and that actually made me laugh, sorry xD):
"Yes. Do you feel that every set of arms that doesnít work just breaks you father apart?" I think you meant 'farther' and not 'father'. But in my mind, my overly active imagination came up with a scene where they were actually trying to break a petrified Draco xDD (I'm sorry)

Anyways, appart from my randomness and being a real pain by pointing out your typos, I hope you have enjoyed the review.
Again, really nice work on characterization and story overall =)

-S. Greengrass

Author's Response: wow. there's no way that i can write that well. thanks, though! (god, my ego is swelling so much.)
no, i don't mind you pointing out the typos. thanks for that. i'll have to fix it. i laughed at that third typo, too, if it makes you feel better ;)
anyways, i LOVE your reviews! they're all amazing and are probably going to give me a swell head. oh, well. thanks again!

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