Hey Hattie! It's Katie here with another review for you.
Argh! Just spent twenty-five minutes writing a review for this chapter, only to find that when you press the 'backspace' key on your laptop, and you haven't clicked on the review box, you lose all of your work. Anyway, never mind that (I'll just have to copy my work every minute or so), on with the review!
All I can say is wow! Just wow! It's literally the only word that I can muster up right now that comes even close to describing how awe-inspiring and faultless this chapter was. I know I must be sounding like a broken record to you by now but your writing style is simply fantastic! Pure poetry! Oh, and your descriptions were beautiful; you painted clear, coulourful pictures in my head, I felt like I was there, seeing everything that Teddy was seeing, feeling everything that he was feeling. Just out of curiosity, what literature do you read? Honestly, if there are authors or poets out there that you are learning these amazing writing techniques from, then I'm heading down to the book store first thing tommorow and spending my week's wages on them - that's how much I want your talent! I am literally going to steal your talent lol!
I really like the story so far. Again, it was quite ambiguous with a multitude of unexplained answers left teetering around the edges of the plot, but personally I think that it contributes so much to the overall impact of the story. I really want to know what Victoire has done to make Teddy feel this way. I like your portrayal of her; she seems colder and more insensitive than I'm used to her being in other stories, but I personally think that it makes for a nice change and really fits in with the mood of the story. I find it interesting that she wants to be ugly; you don't often see that with her character - she's usually so very vain and secure wherever her looks are concerned - but yeah, again, it makes for a nice change.
I have no critisisms to offer you (which is again, very frustrating for me). Another flawless chapter. I can't wait to see how you develop this.
- Katie -
Author's Response: Hi Katie!
Curse you, backspace scum! I hate it when that happens, especially when you spent so long on it! I once wrote a massive review - about 600 words - and that happen. Pretty sure I cried and ended up just writing 'well done, that was awesome. Update soon!'. The author never knew what they could have been in for.
Again, thank you so much for your lovely comments. They really do make my day. Descriptions are the bane of existence - whether there's too much so people get dragged down by one too many descriptions of someone's dress, whether there's too little so people have no clue what is going on, whether I'm describing the -right- thing (particularly important in Dominique for clues and that). Especially with this style, you need to get the balance right; it's very simple, very condensed in some places, and sometimes I just find myself describing the colour of Victoire's lips or the paleness of her skin or the moonlight and the shadows. Emotions are more difficult, more complex.
Which books do I read? Just the classics. The Great Gatsby, Room With A View, a bit of Ian McEwan and Cormac McCarthy, A Clockwork Orange, Brighton Rock... stuff like that.
Victoire is a bit crazaaay. She's obsessed with her own and other's immortality - hence the obsession with killing herself and others. She thinks she is an angel. She looks like one, Teddy treats her like one. She obviously doesn't fit anywhere on earth because of her psychopathic tendencies. She is incapable of love, but does love Teddy. She talks about him as if he is merely her companion, someone to keep her company.
Thanks for another wonderful review!