Hi! Sorry for the delay in the review.
I'm just going to say now, very opposed to Dramione, so maybe I'm not the best one to review this! HOWEVER, I was very impressed with how you engaged with the lyric, and the overall challenge of veering away from what Rowling wrote - that must be a little scary!
I thought the language you used was lovely, the start and end were particularly striking. I thought the dialogue was probably too poetic for speech, but it did add to the intensity of the whole scene. Again, though I am uncomfortable with the ship or even the idea of it, I have to say I was very taken with how realistic it was; sure the battle was cause for celebration, but the aftermath wasn't really much better than the war, even if Ron lived unlike here (*sob).
I was really impressed with your mention that Hermione was split between two worlds. I don't read much about Hermione, though obviously she's awesome, but thats always something I wondered about with her. Just thought I'd mention.
Anyway, I really like how you write, very engaging and interesting. I think if parts of it were to be read aloud it would sound beautiful, an amazing gift in any writer.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Hi!
Luckily I didn't write this as the complete Dramione romance I had intended on it being, I ended up making it a friendship piece instead, so I think that might have been a lucky coincidence right there. Although I feel somewhat guilty for directing you towards a piece with a slight Dramione type friendship...
I'm glad the way I used the lyrics worked, the more I thought about it the more I doubted what I had done and in the end I just posted it before I removed it entirely... AU and lyrics just didn't mix well in my mind as I wrote, on one hand I had a story from the song and in the other I had this AU idea floating about, although I'm glad they came together in the end, because being honest AU is kind of scary sometimes... Even if it is pretty much all I write...
I always place a lot of focus into the beginning and ending, and I never know why, but I feel they draw everything else together in a way I can't quite explain, so I'm glad they came across as striking as I was really hoping for something of this effect in the words I chose :) Sadly, I wish Ron had lived here too, but it was not meant to be...
I too agree Hermione is awesome, I always felt she would be torn between the two worlds although the idea is rarely explored, or I rarely see it (probably my lack of fanfiction reading recently) and I'm glad you liked the mention.
Thank you so much for your amazing review, (and I'm sorry it took so long for me to reply). I truly appreciate it!