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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
That was so sweet, but so sad at the same time! I loved every word of it, and even though I am a loyal Romione shipper, I fell in love with this songfic. The lyrics grafted themselves beautilfully in between the words, and it flowed like magic. Your descriptions were simply amazing. They were by far my favorite part. I could nearly feel the sand and the waves, and I had such a clear image in my mind that I felt like I was there. I am so jealous of yor ability to put words together like that.

The only small critique I have is that the dialogue could be a bit stiff at times. I think your characters were overly formal. Don't be afraid of contractions! There were a lot of "there are"'s that I think would have sounded better as "there's" just because that's closer to how most people normally speak. There were also a few grammar errors, that made the story a bit confusing to read at times, so I would suggest proofreading again or getting a beta, but other than that your story was simply amazing. You have a talent for descriptions, which I love. Great job, really!

Author's Response: Thank so much. I had a very clear image of how I wanted the scene to be and what I wanted the characters doing so I'm really happy that it came across with the descriptions.

I will give the story another proof read and have a look at the dialogue and see what I can do. I don't use contractions all the time when I talk which is why the sometimes come across in my writing.

Thanks again for the review and for all the tips.


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