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Review:Dalek194 says:
A very enjoyable-to-read, wonderfully descriptive piece of fluff. I like how you personify the air and the day at the beginning. The description and detail is rich throughout, Fred and George are perfectly in character, and the twist at the end revealing that the whole thing was actually in first person was clever; it explains why Fred and George are exactly identical, not even a wild strand of hair to tell them appart (to Lee's eyes), and why the girl is described as so beautiful.

Who was the girl, by the way? Was she an OC? But it kind of worked not giving her a name. The only other thing I would say is that it seems very odd when the POV suddenly is revealed as Lee's; maybe you could link that part a bit better.

However, overall, this story was a rich-in-detail, enjoyable to read, cleverly done one-shot, good work!

Author's Response: Hey thanks heaps! I was originally writing it in first person but I somehow felt it was like someone was commenting so I changed it :P. I don't actually know who the girl was. It could have been an OC, it could have been someone in cannon. My muse just demanded that I put here in there :P. Thanks again!!

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