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Review:nitra_black says:
HI,

I've been reading through your story and i always tend to read a few chapters, then review, and im really enjoying it.

I love this Charlie character she is very scatter brain, and the way you write her stream of conscious really reflects that, sometimes its drags a lil, we don't necessarily need to hear every thought, but i get why you do it.

I also really like your Albus, usually he's the reserved angst-y teenage character, i only hope that eventually something magical (*gotta love the reference, lol) will bring these two together.

As an extra point, as well you might consider adding more of a sub plot or a twist, just to spice it up and prevent it from getting tedious..!!! ( you can sense my need to cause drama and mayhem, lol)

Hope you don't take my critic to harshly as i love love LOVE your story, can't wait to read on :)

~Kim

Author's Response: Don't worry I need to be told where I can improve otherwise I can't get better! Charlie and I have one main thing in common nd that's we both have scatter brains, so I can easily not put as much as her thoughts into the chapter and don't worry a sub plot is comming and very soon XD. and thanks for your lovely long review.
Maddie

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