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Review:justonemorefic says:
Oh my god Hattie howww are you so glorious? The words. The -words-. I love how you use her lips throughout this chapter. That particular moment with her birthday especially.

And that talk about their fathers, I can't even begin to describe how wonderful that whole scene is. Their words feel like dialogue but the accompanying descriptions make it feel like poetry at the same time.

"Your words are jumbled, conceited, overwhelming incomprehensible that I always have to decipher you through your movements, through the slight flicker of your eyes or the way you kiss me."

and

"You define nature, not refine it."

Sooo much love.

But you definitely set up this sort of eerie mood and then it actually becomes unsettling. Those last paragraphs -shudder- I love this trade of imagery, the prey/predator sides to Teddy. I still don't know what or who to believe.

Many ♥

Author's Response: Oh, Gina, Gina, Gina... thank you so much!

She lovin' on dem lips. I have athing for writing about red lips against white skin, I don't know why. It's so old-fashioned, in a way, but the red against the white is purrrdy.

Dialogue can sometimes ruin things, so I kept it considerably low key. A lot of the spoken lines are actually quite simple and sometimes cliche, but I think it works - especially when she dumps him. I had to restrain myself to not put in 'it's not you, it's me'.

Glad you like those quotes!

Thanks for reading and reviewing! ♥

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