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Review:thehyacinthgirl says:
Hey there!

I love your works, you know that! But I am going to be nitpicky - sorry. I just noticed you gave Cho blue eyes and I believe they are actually brown. All I remember is the books saying is that they're dark, and as she's Asian maybe I assumed brown or black. But I could've sworn it said brown somewhere.

Ah well.

As far as grammatical errors and spelling goes, I didn't see anything that needed mending so kudos there.

This reminds me somewhat of marinahill's Luna Lovegood series regarding Luna's dead mother and Ariana Dumbledore.

It's rather poetic and lovely.

If I had any qualms at all with this piece it would be while it flows well and it is appropriately paced, I would have loved to see a bit more description. It is incredibly short.

I would have loved to see more flash backs or simply more conversation with 'Cedric'.

All in all, though, this was a very nice piece!

Great job!


Linders

Author's Response: LINDERS. HEY!
This is the slowest review response in the world, so sorry. Maybe it's because you are so lovely and have completely made me feel a fool by pointing out Cho's eyes aren't blue... I think I had to go on a long walk of shame after that, haha! Thank you so much for pointing that out. Your the first person to notice, which only proves what a thoughtful reviewer you are.
I think those suggestions are actually very good, and when I edit this (must change eye colour, haha!) I will take them into consideration. Generally my muse doesn't know what length is so... ;)
Thank you so much for your incredible feedback as always Linders.
Heaps of love,
Helena


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