I always loathed anything that wasn't Lily/James, because they are beautiful together and I couldn't see any of the Marauder's betraying James in such a way; but I adore this.
It's just so beautiful and so sweet, and so innocent. It is full of heartbreak and angst, but hope and bliss, and I just can't help but smile. Remus is happy. Even if it only lasts that night, and it is so incredibly cute.
I love your characterizations of Lily and Remus both because they seem to be spot on, though, she truly doesn't understand his inner angst I don't think [I don't think she knew what he was until after Hogwarts or maybe she worked that out on her own, I don't think the book ever says], and yet she instinctively knows something's wrong.
I also adore his initial offense to the statement that he never laughs. I am a rather serious person, myself, and I get horribly offended when my mother insists that I cannot take a joke. So I think it's a realistic emotion.
Not to mention, this is so cute, that you really can't hold it against Remus. Even if he feels guilty about it himself.
As for grammar and spelling - I didn't pick up on any grammatical snafu's so awesome job! You know how much I love those polished pieces!
This was amazing, Helena! I'm so proud of you for writing this, too, as it seems the longest of your works yet! Not to mention, it's amazing to boot.
Author's Response: OH LINDERS! Thank you for all these incredible reviews. They were really something lovely to come home to, and you always read with such care and leave such thoughtful comments. Heaps and heaps of hugs and thanks.
I definately agree, that's why I was so nervous about writing it. It's also why there is a suggestion of it not neccesarily being a lasting thing but I think that it's believable they may have had a moment of understanding or being there for each other. I'm very happy you found it sweet, I know you mentioned angst, and I was worried that might take over, but very happy it didn't. Yay for cuteness. Remus deserves a little bit of it at least :D
You liked the characterizations! I can't tell you how happy this makes me. Lily seems so difficult, I couldn't write her or pin down her character at all. I have all these contrasting ideas in my head about her character, so I was really unsure, and in the end I feel almost as if I just moulded her to my liking rather than really getting a grip of her character :P But I suppose that is something that comes with practice. But as you can see, the fact that you can find realism in how I wrote her means an awful lot.
I'm glad you liked that! Especially that you picked up on it. I know Remus is the serious one of his group, but he likes to laugh too, we all do. I don't think we always take it easily when someone tells us how we are either.
As for grammar, I'm pleased, but it was all thanks to Gillian. She was amazing at beta'ing this, and even titled it for me haha. â¥
Baww, thank you for being proud of me. Length is something I need to do more of I know ;)
You are far too lovely, this made my day so much.