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Review:thehyacinthgirl says:
Aw, I loved this story. It was so cute. I love Nancy and Albus. They seriously make the most devine couple. Different in so many ways and yet they somehow fit together like a jigsaw puzzle.

It was really rather different from most Albus-OC stories I've read, so I thank you for that. Originality is something that I've always held near and dear to my heart.

I loved your characterization in this chapter, as well as the others. Not to mention the banter and flow seemed to go at a perfect pace.

This paragraph actually made me laugh out loud hysterically for a minute or so: The blonde shook his head and looks mildly amused. “He was threatened by a group of Hufflepuffs – well, there are just too many things wrong with that sentence. For starters ‘threatened by’ and ‘Hufflepuffs’ are two terms that should never be used in the same sentence. Unless it’s ‘The Hufflepuffs felt threatened by everything from the Slytherin Quidditch team to a pair of dirty socks’.”

Ah, Scorpius. Can't say that I blame him for saying that, though. I can't imagine a gaggle of Hufflepuffs being that intimidating.

As far as spelling and grammar go, I did pick up on an error: Lily pushed my should be Lily pushed me. Other than that, I didn't find any other mistakes.

Nice job & great story!


Linders

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm sorry that it's taken so long to get back to you. I'm so glad that you've enjoyed this story!
Writing Nancy and Albus was such an interesting experience for me; I had never written anything like it before.
That paragraph is a favourite of mine, so I'm happy that you like it.
I will try to fix that error when I have a spare moment. Thank you again, Linders!


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